Comments on: Angels at Sea http://sicmagazine.org/angelsatsea/ Sat, 31 Jul 2010 14:20:46 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.3.2 By: Justin http://sicmagazine.org/angelsatsea/#comment-3614 Justin Thu, 10 Dec 2009 01:08:57 +0000 http://sicmagazine.org/angelsatsea/#comment-3614 *** This first half is off topic--sort of--but hang in there. *** Eh? "Men feel emotion through their eyes.."? Wow, way to perpetuate the "dumb caveman" stereotype there, Maurice. And the best way to "win" is to not "play" a game. (That'd be the first rule.) Maybe the koan revelation/awakening that you can't be anything if you can't be nothing applies here? Which implies that if you cannot be happy alone, what will another person be able to do for you? Now, sorry to drift--I did really enjoy the poem, Candace. You have a strong voice in that piece! Would I be out of line to mention that you relied on a couple of clichéd images that do a disservice to the depth of your message here? For example, "falling stars" is a bit too cutesy a phrase for the voice in your poem to use. It kind of pulls me out of the moment/disrupts the flow because that's an image many girls & boys have used (and will continue to use--long past the death of the stars they mention). It's the difference between a very good poem & brilliant one. Overall, you've taken a universal, secret, true pain & made it something we can all share (and hence take comfort) in. I think it's a great piece. I hope to see more! Nothing but the best to you, Justin *** This first half is off topic–sort of–but hang in there. ***
Eh? “Men feel emotion through their eyes..”? Wow, way to perpetuate the “dumb caveman” stereotype there, Maurice. And the best way to “win” is to not “play” a game. (That’d be the first rule.) Maybe the koan revelation/awakening that you can’t be anything if you can’t be nothing applies here? Which implies that if you cannot be happy alone, what will another person be able to do for you?

Now, sorry to drift–I did really enjoy the poem, Candace. You have a strong voice in that piece! Would I be out of line to mention that you relied on a couple of clichéd images that do a disservice to the depth of your message here? For example, “falling stars” is a bit too cutesy a phrase for the voice in your poem to use. It kind of pulls me out of the moment/disrupts the flow because that’s an image many girls & boys have used (and will continue to use–long past the death of the stars they mention).
It’s the difference between a very good poem & brilliant one. Overall, you’ve taken a universal, secret, true pain & made it something we can all share (and hence take comfort) in. I think it’s a great piece.
I hope to see more!
Nothing but the best to you, Justin

]]> By: maurice smith http://sicmagazine.org/angelsatsea/#comment-438 maurice smith Wed, 09 Jul 2008 15:17:53 +0000 http://sicmagazine.org/angelsatsea/#comment-438 Yes, I agree. This is a literary piece of art. I enjoyed it, as well as felt the pain of feminine equality, and the need to keep up with the Joannes to win a mate. I have spoken to many women who actually say that their appearance is for other women mostly, and not for men. I suppose men will never know women and vice versa. I blame the media for crippling men in the beginning, by showing them as whores and cheaters and the overall reason for ending relationships. They are also responsible for the interpretation of what "women" should look like. I hate the makeup, but the butch look scares me. What I've learned in my years is this: the one we want very seldom wants us, and when we settle for someone to be with, we end up ruining it, just as depicted on TV, because men feel emotion through their eyes, and women through their hearts and many other facets. However, since women are taking more of the role of bread winner, I imagine this will change and women too will have the male mindset of, "might as well take one of the best ones and enjoy it, because it won't last anyway." It might just boil down to a chemical reaction which causes Anna Nicole to be in love with 90-year-old billionaires. A man has to be 90 to understand the emotions of a woman in her 20s. The money helps too. Sorry for the long narrative, but your poem inspired thought, which makes it Very Good. Yes, I agree. This is a literary piece of art. I enjoyed it, as well as felt the pain of feminine equality, and the need to keep up with the Joannes to win a mate. I have spoken to many women who actually say that their appearance is for other women mostly, and not for men. I suppose men will never know women and vice versa. I blame the media for crippling men in the beginning, by showing them as whores and cheaters and the overall reason for ending relationships. They are also responsible for the interpretation of what “women” should look like. I hate the makeup, but the butch look scares me.

What I’ve learned in my years is this: the one we want very seldom wants us, and when we settle for someone to be with, we end up ruining it, just as depicted on TV, because men feel emotion through their eyes, and women through their hearts and many other facets. However, since women are taking more of the role of bread winner, I imagine this will change and women too will have the male mindset of, “might as well take one of the best ones and enjoy it, because it won’t last anyway.”

It might just boil down to a chemical reaction which causes Anna Nicole to be in love with 90-year-old billionaires. A man has to be 90 to understand the emotions of a woman in her 20s. The money helps too. Sorry for the long narrative, but your poem inspired thought, which makes it Very Good.

]]> By: Kara Newland http://sicmagazine.org/angelsatsea/#comment-425 Kara Newland Fri, 27 Jun 2008 17:35:11 +0000 http://sicmagazine.org/angelsatsea/#comment-425 Candace- Beautifully written! Good for you for publishing this. You are a very talented poet and writer. I look forward to reading more from you. Candace-
Beautifully written! Good for you for publishing this. You are a very talented poet and writer. I look forward to reading more from you.

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